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Post by jialingjin on Oct 7, 2008 7:11:00 GMT -5
Now I KNOW there was another post here that said you are done and ready for review. I checked the security logs.
Deleting a post and then re-posting counts s as bumping more than once every 3 days which is against the rules as well as RUDE (Do you think we don't know that you're ready? You're file has been sitting open on my desktop for me to work on it for 2 days now!) and that earns you a warning. Do it again and I will make you wait a week for a new review.
Please do NOT delete posts just to post a new one. We have LIVES. Just because we can goof around in the choi does not mean we aren't doing work. I sit here writing papers and doing my art projects. Reviews take time because we read EVERY word. PLEASE be patient. We are WELL aware that you're waiting.
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Post by jialingjin on Oct 7, 2008 19:58:55 GMT -5
Physical Appearance:
*Hands in the air* That is a lot closer to what I am talking about!
Clothing/Armor:
Again - if you're going to include the gauntlets.. you need to describe them. I can't tell anything about them if you just say gauntlets.
Thank you for adding the coat.
Background: Drop the direct reference to Hama.
Also - You need to change how she discovered her bending. No child can bend that strong right away. It's a learning process. Remeber how katara struggled with even bending in the first episode (Except when angry)? Tone it down to less than prodigal levels. Like.. she splashes a bucket of water.. but bends it back into the bucket.
Other than that.. what you've added is much better than before. Thank you.
Make those changes and you're in.
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Post by vaan on Oct 7, 2008 21:26:30 GMT -5
I changed it so that she learned it one day out in a storm as a means of staying dry until her parents found her. I changed the other stuff as well that you asked.
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Post by jialingjin on Oct 8, 2008 13:20:48 GMT -5
*Head desk* Two steps forward.. one step back.
I find it just hard to believe that her mother and father would LEAVE her outside and not be outside searching frantically even in the worst of the storm for her? C'mon. Please. Something just normal.
You are SOOOO close to getting this role but you keep trying to make it something that it shouldn't be. I am not trying to keep you from this role so please, realize how absurd of an idea that it is that she would be left out.
Just a normal... Oh hey! I can move water moment of discovery.. please. please. please. please.
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Post by vaan on Oct 8, 2008 22:11:35 GMT -5
Yeah, point taken. Okay, she spilled some water on her clothing, and used bending to get rid of it.
If this is acceptable, may I please have this moved?
And Jia. Thank you. I appreciate all the help you've given to me. I've never been on a site where the mods are more dedicated to the well-being of the site. A lot of mods on other sites are lazy and stuff, and just accept a profile based on length. But you read through, thoroughly, and offered intelligent advice. You're good at what you do.
Eep...I sound so much like the typical stereotype for small-town Canadians in this post. I don't mean to freak you out with so many compliments. Sorry. ^^ Ack. doing it again. Being over apologetic. xD I can't hide who I am. -flees before Jia can capture me-
(I've edited this post like ten...wait, now eleven times.)
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Post by jialingjin on Oct 9, 2008 11:32:53 GMT -5
Alright. I'm very hesitant to do this, so I expect and hope you to prove me wrong. There are still some things I'm iffy on.. and yeah.
If you still want this position, we need you to create a Katara Account or change the name of your current account (Seeing as how Vaan is a FF12 character and yeah..).
I approve this profile.. even if I'm scared to death to. >>;
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Post by vaan on Oct 9, 2008 11:40:45 GMT -5
Okay. What I'm gonna do is, copy my profile, create a new account, and repost it. Then, I'll delete the Vaan account, and still be able to modify the profile if the need arises.
Can I ask what you're iffy on? If a pm is preferred, then I'll re-ask.
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