Post by Teiú on Nov 5, 2007 19:53:40 GMT -5
I finished this one now. It may have some grammar errors and stuff but it is because i finished this one in a rush. The sample is here too (it is a bit long but i needed too). (im sorry Aden. I fear that, to be fully understandable, you will need to read it all) I need to go so it is all. Thanks
Sample RP:
Teiú was almost reaching his house. Peering back he could see the Kasui house exploding with flames. When he got to the door of his house he perceived that he had got out of the house wearing his pajamas. His chest was hurting him, both from the run to his house and the bad feelings of letting the Kasui family behind. He could still remember Kangiro and Kai saying that he was the trustworthiest friend of the family, that they considered Teiú as the very son of Kangiro and brother of Kai. The tears falling from his eyes made seeing difficulty.
When he entered his house though he could distinguish the young female that was inside the dark red cloak. But what was Seung-Ha doing in his house? He then saw his fathers inside his room, taking things and putting inside a backpack. When Seung-Ha saw him she jumped into his arms. Teiú, without understanding what was happening, gave a semi-hug on Seung-Ha.
“When your fathers said you headed to the Kasui house I got in panic. Teiú, to be fast, my father is going to kill you after he deal with the Kasui Clan. I got here to warn you to run, to flee from here.” Said Seung-Ha in a desperate way
“What… why… I mean… why?” Asked Teiú in confuse way.
“He knows you and Kai were good friends and you used to visit the Kasui clan. He thinks you are involved in the plans for conquering the base. The plans that that girl Kaila revealed to my father.”
Teiú’s eyes widened up. “Kaila” he thought, “she betrayed her own blood”. Without having time of doing a reaction Teiú’s parents came from his room with a backpack in hand. Warning that Teiú should get in a hurry to flee from the village they pulled Teiú inside his room to wear clothes for travel
In an obligated and rushed way Teiú started to wear himself. When he was done and got outside the room he realized that his family made a backpack for him, but not for them. “What are you doing, are you not coming with me?” Asked Teiú to his parents “No, I can’t lose you, not you two” continued him. To that they replied that they would slow Teiú down and that he should not worry about it as they would come to a plan to try to save them from captain Hara. At this point Seung-Ha got Teiú’s arm and pulled him out the house. She showed him an ostrich-horse, at Teiú’s house door and explained that she had got it at the base. “I don’t care if you are against war or not, what matter is that I love you and I can't see you die here, at my father’s hands”. As Seung-Ha said that she put an object at Teiú hand. It was a dragon ornate dagger, inside a small peace of leather. Teiú’s parents came and hugged him, as Seung-Ha did. Teiú was static and confused with the sequence of happenings. His hearth was beating hard into his chest, sweat coming down of his face and tears shedding from his eyes. However, Teiú could not sense all this, he was too dazzled to perceive those natural body reactions. Realizing so Teiú’s father caught Teiú in his arms and threw Teiú at the ostrich-horse’s back. Seung-Ha made the animal run and so Teiú got outside the village.
A heavy rain had started at the beginning of Teiú’s confused escapade. A good thing as the soldiers would not gave chase on Teiú at a stormy night like that.
Under the black clouds and the heavy rain, between the sounds of the thunders, Teiú started roaring. His body was feeling a pain so hard to bear that he couldn’t stay in a riding stance. Semi-unconscious he whispered to himself: “I lost… two families… and a love tonight… and for what?… for Fire Nation Pride?” Shouting, he kept on “IT IS FOR YOUR PRIDE FIRE NATION? IT IS FOR YOU OZAI?… NOT, IT IS NOT, IT IS FOR A STUPID WAR THAT STARTED WHEN I WAS NOT EVEN BORN… IT IS FOR THE STUPIDITY OF MEN AND THEIR AMBITIOUS PLANS…”
And under the rumbling noise of thunders and feeling the rhythmic steps of the ostrich-horse Teiú fell to unconciousness.
Teiú was almost reaching his house. Peering back he could see the Kasui house exploding with flames. When he got to the door of his house he perceived that he had got out of the house wearing his pajamas. His chest was hurting him, both from the run to his house and the bad feelings of letting the Kasui family behind. He could still remember Kangiro and Kai saying that he was the trustworthiest friend of the family, that they considered Teiú as the very son of Kangiro and brother of Kai. The tears falling from his eyes made seeing difficulty.
When he entered his house though he could distinguish the young female that was inside the dark red cloak. But what was Seung-Ha doing in his house? He then saw his fathers inside his room, taking things and putting inside a backpack. When Seung-Ha saw him she jumped into his arms. Teiú, without understanding what was happening, gave a semi-hug on Seung-Ha.
“When your fathers said you headed to the Kasui house I got in panic. Teiú, to be fast, my father is going to kill you after he deal with the Kasui Clan. I got here to warn you to run, to flee from here.” Said Seung-Ha in a desperate way
“What… why… I mean… why?” Asked Teiú in confuse way.
“He knows you and Kai were good friends and you used to visit the Kasui clan. He thinks you are involved in the plans for conquering the base. The plans that that girl Kaila revealed to my father.”
Teiú’s eyes widened up. “Kaila” he thought, “she betrayed her own blood”. Without having time of doing a reaction Teiú’s parents came from his room with a backpack in hand. Warning that Teiú should get in a hurry to flee from the village they pulled Teiú inside his room to wear clothes for travel
In an obligated and rushed way Teiú started to wear himself. When he was done and got outside the room he realized that his family made a backpack for him, but not for them. “What are you doing, are you not coming with me?” Asked Teiú to his parents “No, I can’t lose you, not you two” continued him. To that they replied that they would slow Teiú down and that he should not worry about it as they would come to a plan to try to save them from captain Hara. At this point Seung-Ha got Teiú’s arm and pulled him out the house. She showed him an ostrich-horse, at Teiú’s house door and explained that she had got it at the base. “I don’t care if you are against war or not, what matter is that I love you and I can't see you die here, at my father’s hands”. As Seung-Ha said that she put an object at Teiú hand. It was a dragon ornate dagger, inside a small peace of leather. Teiú’s parents came and hugged him, as Seung-Ha did. Teiú was static and confused with the sequence of happenings. His hearth was beating hard into his chest, sweat coming down of his face and tears shedding from his eyes. However, Teiú could not sense all this, he was too dazzled to perceive those natural body reactions. Realizing so Teiú’s father caught Teiú in his arms and threw Teiú at the ostrich-horse’s back. Seung-Ha made the animal run and so Teiú got outside the village.
A heavy rain had started at the beginning of Teiú’s confused escapade. A good thing as the soldiers would not gave chase on Teiú at a stormy night like that.
Under the black clouds and the heavy rain, between the sounds of the thunders, Teiú started roaring. His body was feeling a pain so hard to bear that he couldn’t stay in a riding stance. Semi-unconscious he whispered to himself: “I lost… two families… and a love tonight… and for what?… for Fire Nation Pride?” Shouting, he kept on “IT IS FOR YOUR PRIDE FIRE NATION? IT IS FOR YOU OZAI?… NOT, IT IS NOT, IT IS FOR A STUPID WAR THAT STARTED WHEN I WAS NOT EVEN BORN… IT IS FOR THE STUPIDITY OF MEN AND THEIR AMBITIOUS PLANS…”
And under the rumbling noise of thunders and feeling the rhythmic steps of the ostrich-horse Teiú fell to unconciousness.