Post by nim on Jun 7, 2008 11:02:48 GMT -5
I've never MiSTed before, but it looked like so much fun I just couldn't help myself. I would like to say I am not a mean person, but that would be a lie. Of course I had to do it as myself since all my characters are nice, well mannered people.
So, without forther ado,
A MiSTing of Takki - From: Me To: You
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Name:
Takki wow, I’m not sure what to make fun of first- the fact that you have no last name or that your name sounds a lot like Tacky...
Age:
18 he’s a big boy now **sings Pull-Up’s song**
Gender:
Male Good boy, you know what the dangly thing between your legs means.
Group:
Earth Kingdom Citizen
Nation:
Earth Kingdom
Bender?:
No a part of me wants to say “Thank God,” but I have a feeling it will just be turned against me when this is the only un-sue thing about you.
Physical Appearance:
Takki stands at about 5'10''. He is a bit on the scrawny side and weighs about 140 lbs Holy Christ boy, eat something you freaking anorexic man! A short man, about 5’0”-5’5” weighs and average of 135 lbs-170lbs. Why isn’t your mother feeding you?! . His hair is slightly darker than burnt umber. Takki's *cough*Tacky’s*cough* hair is very crude and simple. Most of the time he puts it in a long ponytail. When it gets to long for comfort I could be wrong, but for most men ‘too long for comfort’ is just barely past their shoulders and honestly with that little pretty face you have going on he looks like a woman. So much for understanding the dongley-doodle between the old legsters he takes the whole length and cuts it with his knife rugged, girly man, rugged . Most of his features match his frame. Anorexic??? His chin neither jutting nor invisible. That's good. An invisible chin would really freak me out. See also, sentence fragment. THERE IS NO VERB THERE! His face is long and thin, much like his mother’s See, woman’s face. AKA they look like anorexic horses... . His nose, however, is rather short and not very long that is the general definition of ‘rather short’ good job, good job. Way to dumb it down for the simpletons reading this. Jerk. . His eyes usually do not show his emotion and are teal Teal? I thought he was E.K. I wasn’t aware they had Teal eyes. Also, eyes generally don't show emotion. They are for vision, they aren't freakin' mood rings. . They are average size for his village I didn't know villages had ordinances about eye sizes... Do they sell the properly-sized ones? "Ordinary Village Eyes! Only five cents. Get them while they're hot!" and was fortunate he did not stand out further Do anorexic womanly people with average eyes ever stand out? Or have the energy to even stand up? with his father’s Northern Water Tribe eye shape WTF? Northern Water Tribe Eyes? I thought this kid was Earth Kingdom? You best stop toying with me boy, this could get ugly and I mean uglier than your character already is. . He has a few scars on his body from training injuries. He even has a few bite marks when he got too carried away with Neya …his dog? . His body is not extremely muscular because he never eats because his training focused on agility rather than strength News flash, you need muscle for agility too, and you also need to NOT be emaciated . His muscle does prevent his ribs from sticking out *puts away drum sticks* darn but his joints and sides feel solid and bony to the touch Oh good, our Water Tribe Earth Kingdom hybrid isn’t a liquid . His skin is just a bit darker than the average Earth Kingdom citizen’s you forget a comma here but he appears just to be on the very end of the Earth kingdom skin tone spectrum If he had gone one hex code further, he would have had to apply for citizenship in another nation? .
Clothing/Armor:
Takki wears simple cloth clothing as opposed to what other type of clothing??? as his family could not afford all silk clothing A poor sue, how… predictable ***unimpressed glare*** but some was used for the edging of Takki’s jacket and sash. The jacket fits well to Takki’s small frame Really? Doesn’t hang off his bony anoerexic body? the silk being golden yellow. AKA peed on The opening runs just two inches to the left of the center but starts from the center of the throat ? I think you are trying to say something. But neither you nor I know what... . Where the border shifts from the curve to straight down there is a button that slips into a small strip of cloth sewed down on both sides, forming spot for the button to hang over. I’m pretty sure you would have been safe with button or clasp or toggle or any of those fastening words. We non-sues don’t actually need an explanation as to how a button works. Again, though, us simpletons does appreciates your kindly help, sah. The jacket ends at his knees and his sash is placed at his waist.
He has a leather jacket Hey look, it’s The Fonz! EY!!!! underneath to add protection Protection from what, from what I heard about his scars the only thing he needs protection from is himself. Then again, he may need protection from me by the time I’m done because I live by a strict motto, “Save the world, Kill Sues” . It the same size as his jacket but is completely closed. "It the same size?" Your character is asian. You aren't. Learn English. The other difference is that it has a collar that protects his neck up to his ears that curves down to an inch at the center of his neck. My god! A neck up to his ears! How obscene!
Takki’s final I love this word when it comes to The Sue layer is a hunter green cloth shirt with long sleeves to protect his arms form the cold Where the hell is he in the Earth kingdom? I didn't know the EK had a polar ice cap... .
Takki's pants are myrtle Myrtle is a type of tree and/or a female's name... Is it a human suit or a wooden suit?? and are slightly loose I guess Myrtle is a hussy. but not loose enough to get in the way. Gold mine of jokes. Right thurrr. They are long enough to cover his legs completely and cover his shoes slightly Sounds like a pair of pants, weird. .
Takki wears durable leather shoes that were his mother's attempt at making moccasins If they're durable than I don’t think Dear ol’ mum didn’t ‘attempt to make them, she succeeded . The soles are thick enough to prevent objects to break through Again, awkward. Learn to type. Forget to breathe. but he will feel some larger objects under his feet. The only decorative symbol is his mother’s rendition of the Water Tribe and Earth Kingdom symbol formed together I hope you get hauled off to prison for defiling the sacred symbols of these two nations . It is a thinner version of the earth circle with the bottom half of the water symbol inside. There is one on both with moccasin right covering the top. That makes so little sense that I can make neither heads nor tails of it. They get the job done i.e. they fit. and are tight enough not to fall off his feet while fighting. I think you covered that with "They get the job done", unless they have another job...
Takki's quiver and sheath are both made of leather and were home made by his mother. His mother was never one for extravagance and yet she found the time and need to alter the Earth Kingdom and Water Tribe symbols just to sew the half-breed symbol onto his moccasins even though the shoe is the stupidest and most unpractical place for a decoration since it sees the most wear and tear. and left the quiver undecorated. Takki also "also" implies another. What is the other method of bow-securing? secures his longbow with a series of straps.
Weapons:
Takki's main weapon is his mother's longbow Well Isn’t Tacky just a little Mama’s Boy, first he has her face and his nifty shoes, then his quiver and now her very own bow. That poor woman wont have a darn thing left when he’s done. And why isn’t dear ol’ dad pitching in? . It is just an inch shorter than him as he is just a bit taller than her Wow, she’s 5’9” Giant much? By the way, "her" is a predicate noun in a truncated phrase. This should therefore read "He is just a bit shorter than she." . It is a simple self bow made self bow made? Is that like a self-made man? Did the bow carve itself out of the gutters into riches? from the near by wood available. Surprisingly it has lasted many years. It is plain, just like the quiver, but Takki has patched a few of the areas where it began to wear I would just like to know- how the hell you you patch a bow!? I thought these things were a ‘no-repair’ weapon. Your sword breaks they say “well here let me weld that beck together for you. Your bow breaks they say “Man thatt sucks. Kid, go whittle yourself a new one” Or in this case, would another one whittle itself? . The arrows Takki carries are also makeshift but a few are professionally made. They average 80 cm Umm, thought you might want to know, your arrows are almost a yard long. Way to overcompensate. Little peepee. Lolzzz. and have long, thin feathers. Takki also carries his father's fishing knife DIE FISH DIE! made of bone with a you mean 'an" 8 inch blade. Okay, so on the weapon front we have these freakishly long arrows that would be hell to fire and this wimpy little dagger that doesn’t even have a foot long blade. *pats Tacky on shoulder* good luck in battle, dude.
Personality:
Takki is a kind but serious person. He knows when it is time to crack down on certain situations but also when to keep a tight watch. I would argue those go hand in hand. Yet you set them up as opposites... He is willing to help out people in need as he knows what its like to want friendship. He is not to trusting and he often keeps people at arm’s length until he knows and “trusts them with a knife in the dark” as he says I’m going to say he probably has no friends since you can’t really learn to trust someone unless you give them a little space to know you. Also, who the hell trusts even their friends with a knife in the dark? I think I would be afraid they might bump into me or trip and kill themselves, honestly did your mother teach you nothing about the weapons she gave to you? . When he is in a group of people he tries to enforce what he believes is beneficial to the group Again, another reason he has no friends, as all Sues do, Tacky knows what’s best *nods head patronizingly* . He does have moments where he needs to be alone Like when he’s sleeping or taking a shower or pooping or thinking about his amazing new ‘Village idiot' eyes that he just bought for a whole five cents. . These moments are often sparked by memories of his home, whether they are negative or positive. When he is in one of these moods he often just disappears to a remote tree or cliff where he can just let his mind wander Where does he wander when there are no trees or cliffs around? I bet he has a Tree-in-a-Can on hand, just in case he needs to esacpe from the oppressiveness of this non-sue world . His thoughts during this time go anywhere from his past to his favorite topic, history What does history have to do with his reminiscing about ‘home-sweet-home’? "I miss Mom. The Hundred-Years' War lasted 116 years, actually. How drole!" .
Takki is not easily angered but when he is pushed over the edge he will exact his revenge smartly As opposed to exacting his revenge, what, stupidly? . He would often play pranks on his brother with out him ever knowing Takki did it. One of his favorite sayings is “The best criminal is the one no one has heard of.” So he’s a criminal now too? And I thought he sounded like an upstanding Sue with that nice Mommy of his and all. I guess you can’t judge a Sue by his cover.
When approaching a dangerous situation Takki is first warned by Neya long before any human can sense them. My spider(...bat... dog... WHAT ANIMAL BE THIS?!?) senses are tingling! Then, if it is possible, Takki will take to an elevated position and go through the trees Tacky: “Tree-in-a-Can, Go!” until Neya signals that he’s within bow distance Boy, that is one smart dog, good Lassie. See also - if he is within bow distance, he can see them. Or does he fire his yard-long arrows all willy-nilly? . He carries on more carefully until he finds his target and then decides his next actions.
Background:
Takki’s parents were both from very different places with very different cultures So I heard. And how does that make you feel? . His father escaped a pirate raid OMFG hate that was carried out when the town ran out of resources to bribe the captain who was actually from that village Okay let me try to decipher this. His town ran out of resources, Something about pirates and their captain being from the town… I’m not sure how the events are related . They stopped for repairs and Takki’s father stole a small rowboat and used his waterbending abilities to get to the nearest village I’m glad that these pirates were those nice merciful kind that take prisoners and then don’t make sure that they are well-imprisoned . While he was attempting to make enough money to pay for a ferry back to the northern continent Did the rowboat break down? when he heard that a man was looking for a waterbender confusing sentence, but I think I got the idea. Little baby beluga wants to go home . He sought the man out but he was looking for a healer to treat his sister’s leg wound which had crippled her for years *raises hand* Mister daddy of Tacky, didn’t you think that the man looking for a water bender might have been those nice evil pirates that kidnapped you? . He was no healer but he offered to see what he could do "I should warn you. Last time I tried this the person ended up a chicken. And dead." "Oh. If those are the only side-effects, please, continue Mr. Ifailedmedschool. . The minute he saw her he fell in love. I did not matter to him that she was a huntress First thing first, of course they fell in love, who ever heard of a one-way relationship, second, what does her being a huntress have to do with anything and how was she a huntress with a bum leg? It doesn’t add up, not at all *dons Sherlock Holms hat* . He stayed and eventually married her and had two children, Niro and Takki.
The town Takki grew up in is near the ocean near the Northern Air Temple. There are forests surrounding the town and a path that leads to a mining town where they get many of their resources So I noticed you lived in the mountains…I think you need to visit a real mountain valley since it looks a little more surrounded by mountains and a little less like a wide open plain . The landscape is hilly Gee. In the mountains? Hills? You are so totally joshing me. and many of the children have fun rolling down the hills But not Tacky because he was just too emo and untrusting to play with the other kids . There is a beach not so far away but the only way down is a cliff with a waterfall going down it. Often Takki would meditate in the lone tree there. He lived with his father, mother, brother, and uncle. I’m going to say your geography sucks and let that be that. Also, nice attachment of the completely unneeded uncle, Sue suits you.
As a toddler Takki was always calm and had uncanny cognitive ability. Often he would concern his parents just by staring into the distance. Otherwise he did play happily with his parents just like most babies. Baby, I thought he was a toddler? His brother would often tease him by keeping his favorite toy, a glass ball with sand in it, well above his reach. Umm, glass is kind of expensive, I thought his family was poor and who gives a baby a glass toy, how frwaking stupid and negligent are his parents?! He was always very careful with the item as he learned early that see through objects are easily breakable. Not all of them, I can see-through your head and I haven’t been able to break it yet. One day his brother accidentally dropped the orb, shattering both the fragile glass and Takki’s spirit. The thought haunted him for months afterwards and even refused to eat for a few days afterwards oh so this is where the anorexia started . He still carries the shards in a small pouch he keeps inside a pocket within his clothing without any fear that the sharp glass might poke through the thin rabric and scratch him at any given moment.
After he reached six he finally forgave his brother, even though he constantly tormented him Aww, brotherly love. I bet your bro was just pining for your forgiveness all these years. . He would spend most of his time with his father on the fishing boat while Niro played with his friends. Takki didn’t develop a relation ship with members outside of his family for some time. At age 10 he did find a new friend. He had found a fox kit running from a group of kids with sticks No, no, [please stop now, it’s too much. shields face . Niro was among the children and mocked Takki for defending the “stupid” animal. Takki was too small in size to do something but his strong courage allowed him to stay in defense of the kit, even when the others decided to make another game with Takki and the sticks. He released the kit and it ran but returned to Takki the next day. God, you just had to go there, you just had to have his one and only friend be a freaking wild fox! Ever think that maybe baby fox had a mommy it needed to get back to? That maybe it had better things to do than come back to the village outcast? No, I didn’t think so. I hope mommy fox has rabies and when she comes back for her kid she passes them on and rids the world of another sue.
When Takki reached eight I though he was ten just a second ago, did he discover a time machine in his stangely located village? his father left to fight in the Earth Kingdom's army Why would the Earth Kingdom Army want a Water Bender? Honestly no logical train of thought ever went through a sues head . His decision caused a rift in the family. After much reflection Takki determined that his father must have left to stop the war from reaching their village, much like what he failed to do when his home town was raided I’m pretty sure the war and Pirates are not really related. Truth is little Tacky, daddy just couldn’t bare to watch his little boy grow up such a sue . Niro spent most of his time brooding and their uncle had to stay at home to help support the family Why doesn’t his uncle have his own family to support and why can’t Tacky’s mother huntress support them? . One day Niro never came home. Takki and Neya were the only ones able to look for him. They spent all night looking for him but he was never found. All was well again when a neighbor brought him home. To Tacky’s dismay, he had hoped his reason for cutting himself had disappeard forever. Takki was from there on charged with looking after his older brother. The only thing was that Niro did not like to be followed and would thrash Takki whenever he found him. This allowed Takki to hone his stealth skills. Why isn’t Mommy doing anything to keep big brother from hurting poor weak Tacky. Though, I bet the thrashings have more to do with Tacky being a mama’s boy and less to do with his following him around.
School was hard for Takki. For one they did not allow Neya in the class room because she was a wild animal and the tend to be distracting but she would not leave him. He asked his teacher for any other way and ended up talking about why he wasn’t as active in class the reason was that he did not want to show up Niro and get attacked because Niro was just a big brother with no emotional attachment to his younger sibling and simply enjoyed watching him squirm . His teacher came up with the solution to send him to an outdoor class for ” advanced ” students that was made because many children felt the same pressure from their peers Because it was very often that the younger kids in the class were beaten by their older siblings for no good reason and the teacher just let them get away with it . This solved both the problems with Neya and Niro. During his schooling he excelled as a student and loved history. His favorite form was mythology and he had heard many fables from his father before he left. His weak topic was math. He never grasped it. He was able to pass it, but only with constant help of his mother who was completely unconcerned about her sons strange attachment to a wild fox and that he older son just beat the crap out of him just for living.
After four years Takki’s father had yet to return. He had a talk with his mother and eventually they were talking about their pasts. Takki gained a great interest in her warrior past. Takki pleaded with her to train him to fight Because every good Sue needs away to defend themselves agains the obvious impending doom that just follows them around and who better to teach him then his mother with a bum leg . She pondered this for days and eventually decided to train him. He trained as often as he could and eventually became very proficient with his mother's old bow. Often he would go into the woods and train with Neya by playing games such as chase. Am I to understand that little Neya, the fox, was totally okay with being chased around with a bow and arrow?
After six years of training Takki feels ready to go into the world and search for his father and a cure for his mother’s crippled leg. except that this would make him twenty when previousdly he was only eighteen… so the time machine is real. By the way, mom could just go see a freaking doctor and figure out what the hell is wrong with her. Though, after waiting almost twenty years to do that she may be screwed.
Pet: umm, dude, no new sections in the form, du-huh.
Neya is a red fox whose mother was killed by skin hunters Like bambi except for stupider . She was chased into Takki’s home town by a group of children with sticks. Takki protected her and an everlasting bond was formed. She is about 10 lbs, 18 inches at the withers, and 38 inches long from nose to tail. Of course, mommy is gone and she chooses Mister Anti-Social himself to be her new guardian.
She is extremely fast and can outrun almost anyone. Neya does not usually fight but instead scouts or catches food for them to eat. She has acute senses and can pinpoint an enemy over 100 feet away. While they are traveling though unfamiliar territory she leaves urine to mark where they have been. Umm, eww gross and also if she’s so fast why did she need Tacky to save her?
Neya is very curious but will listen to Takki when they are sneaking , but only then any other time she just ignores him like any good living thing should do . Often Neya will climb up onto Takki’s shoulders and rest. Neya is not always with Takki but is always ready to be called to his aid. When she does fight she will pounce from a hiding place and latch on to the opponent’s neck like the vicious weasel that she is.
Sample RP:
Takki began to feel a bead of sweat form on his brow. He scanned to forest floor, looking for any sign of movement. Takki’s search was fulfilled when a small red blur raced across the leafy ground. Takki’s hair blew free of its constraints as he moved from tree to tree and eventually dropped to the ground.
”I know you are around here somewhere. But where?” He thought to himself as he searched for any signs that his target had passed through here. He heard a sound from a hole under the roots of a tree. He began to spin around when the red blur knocked him on his back. Takki felt the fox’s small, wet tongue licking his face.
“Enough Neya!” Takki said with a smile.
They laid on the leafy ground both panting hard …awkward… . Takki was beginning to fall asleep when a wet tongue licked him back awake. He groggily opened his eyes as Neya was pulling on his clothing with her teeth. As he opened his eyes hey saw an orange glow between the trees.
“Neya, we have to get home, come on girl.” He said as he leapt to his feet. Not out searching for father anymore? Decide the big bad world outside your displaced town was too much?
His companion arose and answered with a bark. With Neya leading the way the duo ran at full speed back to the village.
When they finally made it back both his mother Now his moms a lesbian, when did this happen?! was standing at the doorway with Niro smirking behind. She had obviously been waiting awhile judging by the worried look on her face but not long enough for her anger to fade.
“Takki, you may be old enough to find a job but you are not old enough to stay out until all hours of the night under my roof, do you understand?” Tacky: “But Mo-om,” Mommy: “Don’t you ‘but mom’ me mister!” His mother scolded him in an angry tone with her finger pointed at her while the other was engaged in holding her crutch.
Takki’s shoulders dropped and he looked towards the ground, not to show submission but to hide the anger he held towards Niro for mocking him literally behind his mother’s back and he would exact revenge later in a ‘smart’ manner. Muwhahhah…. Going to say, not nearly as satisfactory as a good ol’ punch to the face . He made a nod and headed into the house but not without receiving a quick smack to the back of the head from Niro.
”Its okay, the snakes should be looking for food any time now…” He thought to himself, remembering the present he left in Niro’s room, who’s doors never opened Holy Christ, this family is sick! .
He knew by now that being home late meant no dinner but it really didn’t bother Takki that much since he was anorexic as he and Neya found a sweet berry bush and had eaten to their heart content. He walked sullenly into his room and shut the door lightly. He let himself fall into his bed and let out a big sigh. He was nowhere near the point of sleepiness but he was falling asleep on the leaf ridden, stick infested ground of the forest earlier so he let his mind wonder. Eventually his train of thought led him to an interesting idea.
”I think I may be ready to go out into the world. But how?”
He quickly popped back into consciousness and sat up in his bed as the thought traveled through his head.
”I could just leave, but then mom would be horrified. Telling her wouldn’t be the best idea ever either though…” Just then an idea popped into his head. He climbed to his feet and carefully stepped over Neya, who decided to nap in the middle of the floor, and quickly scribbled down on some spare parchment,
I have decided to start my journey now.
It is not you fault in any way. In fact I am doing this to help you.
I know that if I search I can find a cure for your injury and you’ll be able to walk again. even though you seem to get along well enough, standing at the door for hours waiting for me
That is not the only reason. You know where I am going to go first.
I am heading directly to Ba-Sing-Sei to search for Dad.
I know all of your objections but I have to, and I can not return until I complete at least one of those goals for it would be to hard to leave again if I did.
Your loving son,
Takki Tacky
Takki cut his long hair in a single swipe with his hunting knife to give his mother a something to hold on to of him. Eww, of all the things to leave your mother why in gods name would you give her your hair!? Tears began to fall from his eyes as he draped Neya across his shoulders and climbed out the window.
This is the longest turd in history. Really. The longest piece of crap I have ever encountered. So many words, saying so little. YOU ARE A WASTE OF WORDS, WORD-WASTER!
So, without forther ado,
A MiSTing of Takki - From: Me To: You
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Name:
Takki wow, I’m not sure what to make fun of first- the fact that you have no last name or that your name sounds a lot like Tacky...
Age:
18 he’s a big boy now **sings Pull-Up’s song**
Gender:
Male Good boy, you know what the dangly thing between your legs means.
Group:
Earth Kingdom Citizen
Nation:
Earth Kingdom
Bender?:
No a part of me wants to say “Thank God,” but I have a feeling it will just be turned against me when this is the only un-sue thing about you.
Physical Appearance:
Takki stands at about 5'10''. He is a bit on the scrawny side and weighs about 140 lbs Holy Christ boy, eat something you freaking anorexic man! A short man, about 5’0”-5’5” weighs and average of 135 lbs-170lbs. Why isn’t your mother feeding you?! . His hair is slightly darker than burnt umber. Takki's *cough*Tacky’s*cough* hair is very crude and simple. Most of the time he puts it in a long ponytail. When it gets to long for comfort I could be wrong, but for most men ‘too long for comfort’ is just barely past their shoulders and honestly with that little pretty face you have going on he looks like a woman. So much for understanding the dongley-doodle between the old legsters he takes the whole length and cuts it with his knife rugged, girly man, rugged . Most of his features match his frame. Anorexic??? His chin neither jutting nor invisible. That's good. An invisible chin would really freak me out. See also, sentence fragment. THERE IS NO VERB THERE! His face is long and thin, much like his mother’s See, woman’s face. AKA they look like anorexic horses... . His nose, however, is rather short and not very long that is the general definition of ‘rather short’ good job, good job. Way to dumb it down for the simpletons reading this. Jerk. . His eyes usually do not show his emotion and are teal Teal? I thought he was E.K. I wasn’t aware they had Teal eyes. Also, eyes generally don't show emotion. They are for vision, they aren't freakin' mood rings. . They are average size for his village I didn't know villages had ordinances about eye sizes... Do they sell the properly-sized ones? "Ordinary Village Eyes! Only five cents. Get them while they're hot!" and was fortunate he did not stand out further Do anorexic womanly people with average eyes ever stand out? Or have the energy to even stand up? with his father’s Northern Water Tribe eye shape WTF? Northern Water Tribe Eyes? I thought this kid was Earth Kingdom? You best stop toying with me boy, this could get ugly and I mean uglier than your character already is. . He has a few scars on his body from training injuries. He even has a few bite marks when he got too carried away with Neya …his dog? . His body is not extremely muscular because he never eats because his training focused on agility rather than strength News flash, you need muscle for agility too, and you also need to NOT be emaciated . His muscle does prevent his ribs from sticking out *puts away drum sticks* darn but his joints and sides feel solid and bony to the touch Oh good, our Water Tribe Earth Kingdom hybrid isn’t a liquid . His skin is just a bit darker than the average Earth Kingdom citizen’s you forget a comma here but he appears just to be on the very end of the Earth kingdom skin tone spectrum If he had gone one hex code further, he would have had to apply for citizenship in another nation? .
Clothing/Armor:
Takki wears simple cloth clothing as opposed to what other type of clothing??? as his family could not afford all silk clothing A poor sue, how… predictable ***unimpressed glare*** but some was used for the edging of Takki’s jacket and sash. The jacket fits well to Takki’s small frame Really? Doesn’t hang off his bony anoerexic body? the silk being golden yellow. AKA peed on The opening runs just two inches to the left of the center but starts from the center of the throat ? I think you are trying to say something. But neither you nor I know what... . Where the border shifts from the curve to straight down there is a button that slips into a small strip of cloth sewed down on both sides, forming spot for the button to hang over. I’m pretty sure you would have been safe with button or clasp or toggle or any of those fastening words. We non-sues don’t actually need an explanation as to how a button works. Again, though, us simpletons does appreciates your kindly help, sah. The jacket ends at his knees and his sash is placed at his waist.
He has a leather jacket Hey look, it’s The Fonz! EY!!!! underneath to add protection Protection from what, from what I heard about his scars the only thing he needs protection from is himself. Then again, he may need protection from me by the time I’m done because I live by a strict motto, “Save the world, Kill Sues” . It the same size as his jacket but is completely closed. "It the same size?" Your character is asian. You aren't. Learn English. The other difference is that it has a collar that protects his neck up to his ears that curves down to an inch at the center of his neck. My god! A neck up to his ears! How obscene!
Takki’s final I love this word when it comes to The Sue layer is a hunter green cloth shirt with long sleeves to protect his arms form the cold Where the hell is he in the Earth kingdom? I didn't know the EK had a polar ice cap... .
Takki's pants are myrtle Myrtle is a type of tree and/or a female's name... Is it a human suit or a wooden suit?? and are slightly loose I guess Myrtle is a hussy. but not loose enough to get in the way. Gold mine of jokes. Right thurrr. They are long enough to cover his legs completely and cover his shoes slightly Sounds like a pair of pants, weird. .
Takki wears durable leather shoes that were his mother's attempt at making moccasins If they're durable than I don’t think Dear ol’ mum didn’t ‘attempt to make them, she succeeded . The soles are thick enough to prevent objects to break through Again, awkward. Learn to type. Forget to breathe. but he will feel some larger objects under his feet. The only decorative symbol is his mother’s rendition of the Water Tribe and Earth Kingdom symbol formed together I hope you get hauled off to prison for defiling the sacred symbols of these two nations . It is a thinner version of the earth circle with the bottom half of the water symbol inside. There is one on both with moccasin right covering the top. That makes so little sense that I can make neither heads nor tails of it. They get the job done i.e. they fit. and are tight enough not to fall off his feet while fighting. I think you covered that with "They get the job done", unless they have another job...
Takki's quiver and sheath are both made of leather and were home made by his mother. His mother was never one for extravagance and yet she found the time and need to alter the Earth Kingdom and Water Tribe symbols just to sew the half-breed symbol onto his moccasins even though the shoe is the stupidest and most unpractical place for a decoration since it sees the most wear and tear. and left the quiver undecorated. Takki also "also" implies another. What is the other method of bow-securing? secures his longbow with a series of straps.
Weapons:
Takki's main weapon is his mother's longbow Well Isn’t Tacky just a little Mama’s Boy, first he has her face and his nifty shoes, then his quiver and now her very own bow. That poor woman wont have a darn thing left when he’s done. And why isn’t dear ol’ dad pitching in? . It is just an inch shorter than him as he is just a bit taller than her Wow, she’s 5’9” Giant much? By the way, "her" is a predicate noun in a truncated phrase. This should therefore read "He is just a bit shorter than she." . It is a simple self bow made self bow made? Is that like a self-made man? Did the bow carve itself out of the gutters into riches? from the near by wood available. Surprisingly it has lasted many years. It is plain, just like the quiver, but Takki has patched a few of the areas where it began to wear I would just like to know- how the hell you you patch a bow!? I thought these things were a ‘no-repair’ weapon. Your sword breaks they say “well here let me weld that beck together for you. Your bow breaks they say “Man thatt sucks. Kid, go whittle yourself a new one” Or in this case, would another one whittle itself? . The arrows Takki carries are also makeshift but a few are professionally made. They average 80 cm Umm, thought you might want to know, your arrows are almost a yard long. Way to overcompensate. Little peepee. Lolzzz. and have long, thin feathers. Takki also carries his father's fishing knife DIE FISH DIE! made of bone with a you mean 'an" 8 inch blade. Okay, so on the weapon front we have these freakishly long arrows that would be hell to fire and this wimpy little dagger that doesn’t even have a foot long blade. *pats Tacky on shoulder* good luck in battle, dude.
Personality:
Takki is a kind but serious person. He knows when it is time to crack down on certain situations but also when to keep a tight watch. I would argue those go hand in hand. Yet you set them up as opposites... He is willing to help out people in need as he knows what its like to want friendship. He is not to trusting and he often keeps people at arm’s length until he knows and “trusts them with a knife in the dark” as he says I’m going to say he probably has no friends since you can’t really learn to trust someone unless you give them a little space to know you. Also, who the hell trusts even their friends with a knife in the dark? I think I would be afraid they might bump into me or trip and kill themselves, honestly did your mother teach you nothing about the weapons she gave to you? . When he is in a group of people he tries to enforce what he believes is beneficial to the group Again, another reason he has no friends, as all Sues do, Tacky knows what’s best *nods head patronizingly* . He does have moments where he needs to be alone Like when he’s sleeping or taking a shower or pooping or thinking about his amazing new ‘Village idiot' eyes that he just bought for a whole five cents. . These moments are often sparked by memories of his home, whether they are negative or positive. When he is in one of these moods he often just disappears to a remote tree or cliff where he can just let his mind wander Where does he wander when there are no trees or cliffs around? I bet he has a Tree-in-a-Can on hand, just in case he needs to esacpe from the oppressiveness of this non-sue world . His thoughts during this time go anywhere from his past to his favorite topic, history What does history have to do with his reminiscing about ‘home-sweet-home’? "I miss Mom. The Hundred-Years' War lasted 116 years, actually. How drole!" .
Takki is not easily angered but when he is pushed over the edge he will exact his revenge smartly As opposed to exacting his revenge, what, stupidly? . He would often play pranks on his brother with out him ever knowing Takki did it. One of his favorite sayings is “The best criminal is the one no one has heard of.” So he’s a criminal now too? And I thought he sounded like an upstanding Sue with that nice Mommy of his and all. I guess you can’t judge a Sue by his cover.
When approaching a dangerous situation Takki is first warned by Neya long before any human can sense them. My spider(...bat... dog... WHAT ANIMAL BE THIS?!?) senses are tingling! Then, if it is possible, Takki will take to an elevated position and go through the trees Tacky: “Tree-in-a-Can, Go!” until Neya signals that he’s within bow distance Boy, that is one smart dog, good Lassie. See also - if he is within bow distance, he can see them. Or does he fire his yard-long arrows all willy-nilly? . He carries on more carefully until he finds his target and then decides his next actions.
Background:
Takki’s parents were both from very different places with very different cultures So I heard. And how does that make you feel? . His father escaped a pirate raid OMFG hate that was carried out when the town ran out of resources to bribe the captain who was actually from that village Okay let me try to decipher this. His town ran out of resources, Something about pirates and their captain being from the town… I’m not sure how the events are related . They stopped for repairs and Takki’s father stole a small rowboat and used his waterbending abilities to get to the nearest village I’m glad that these pirates were those nice merciful kind that take prisoners and then don’t make sure that they are well-imprisoned . While he was attempting to make enough money to pay for a ferry back to the northern continent Did the rowboat break down? when he heard that a man was looking for a waterbender confusing sentence, but I think I got the idea. Little baby beluga wants to go home . He sought the man out but he was looking for a healer to treat his sister’s leg wound which had crippled her for years *raises hand* Mister daddy of Tacky, didn’t you think that the man looking for a water bender might have been those nice evil pirates that kidnapped you? . He was no healer but he offered to see what he could do "I should warn you. Last time I tried this the person ended up a chicken. And dead." "Oh. If those are the only side-effects, please, continue Mr. Ifailedmedschool. . The minute he saw her he fell in love. I did not matter to him that she was a huntress First thing first, of course they fell in love, who ever heard of a one-way relationship, second, what does her being a huntress have to do with anything and how was she a huntress with a bum leg? It doesn’t add up, not at all *dons Sherlock Holms hat* . He stayed and eventually married her and had two children, Niro and Takki.
The town Takki grew up in is near the ocean near the Northern Air Temple. There are forests surrounding the town and a path that leads to a mining town where they get many of their resources So I noticed you lived in the mountains…I think you need to visit a real mountain valley since it looks a little more surrounded by mountains and a little less like a wide open plain . The landscape is hilly Gee. In the mountains? Hills? You are so totally joshing me. and many of the children have fun rolling down the hills But not Tacky because he was just too emo and untrusting to play with the other kids . There is a beach not so far away but the only way down is a cliff with a waterfall going down it. Often Takki would meditate in the lone tree there. He lived with his father, mother, brother, and uncle. I’m going to say your geography sucks and let that be that. Also, nice attachment of the completely unneeded uncle, Sue suits you.
As a toddler Takki was always calm and had uncanny cognitive ability. Often he would concern his parents just by staring into the distance. Otherwise he did play happily with his parents just like most babies. Baby, I thought he was a toddler? His brother would often tease him by keeping his favorite toy, a glass ball with sand in it, well above his reach. Umm, glass is kind of expensive, I thought his family was poor and who gives a baby a glass toy, how frwaking stupid and negligent are his parents?! He was always very careful with the item as he learned early that see through objects are easily breakable. Not all of them, I can see-through your head and I haven’t been able to break it yet. One day his brother accidentally dropped the orb, shattering both the fragile glass and Takki’s spirit. The thought haunted him for months afterwards and even refused to eat for a few days afterwards oh so this is where the anorexia started . He still carries the shards in a small pouch he keeps inside a pocket within his clothing without any fear that the sharp glass might poke through the thin rabric and scratch him at any given moment.
After he reached six he finally forgave his brother, even though he constantly tormented him Aww, brotherly love. I bet your bro was just pining for your forgiveness all these years. . He would spend most of his time with his father on the fishing boat while Niro played with his friends. Takki didn’t develop a relation ship with members outside of his family for some time. At age 10 he did find a new friend. He had found a fox kit running from a group of kids with sticks No, no, [please stop now, it’s too much. shields face . Niro was among the children and mocked Takki for defending the “stupid” animal. Takki was too small in size to do something but his strong courage allowed him to stay in defense of the kit, even when the others decided to make another game with Takki and the sticks. He released the kit and it ran but returned to Takki the next day. God, you just had to go there, you just had to have his one and only friend be a freaking wild fox! Ever think that maybe baby fox had a mommy it needed to get back to? That maybe it had better things to do than come back to the village outcast? No, I didn’t think so. I hope mommy fox has rabies and when she comes back for her kid she passes them on and rids the world of another sue.
When Takki reached eight I though he was ten just a second ago, did he discover a time machine in his stangely located village? his father left to fight in the Earth Kingdom's army Why would the Earth Kingdom Army want a Water Bender? Honestly no logical train of thought ever went through a sues head . His decision caused a rift in the family. After much reflection Takki determined that his father must have left to stop the war from reaching their village, much like what he failed to do when his home town was raided I’m pretty sure the war and Pirates are not really related. Truth is little Tacky, daddy just couldn’t bare to watch his little boy grow up such a sue . Niro spent most of his time brooding and their uncle had to stay at home to help support the family Why doesn’t his uncle have his own family to support and why can’t Tacky’s mother huntress support them? . One day Niro never came home. Takki and Neya were the only ones able to look for him. They spent all night looking for him but he was never found. All was well again when a neighbor brought him home. To Tacky’s dismay, he had hoped his reason for cutting himself had disappeard forever. Takki was from there on charged with looking after his older brother. The only thing was that Niro did not like to be followed and would thrash Takki whenever he found him. This allowed Takki to hone his stealth skills. Why isn’t Mommy doing anything to keep big brother from hurting poor weak Tacky. Though, I bet the thrashings have more to do with Tacky being a mama’s boy and less to do with his following him around.
School was hard for Takki. For one they did not allow Neya in the class room because she was a wild animal and the tend to be distracting but she would not leave him. He asked his teacher for any other way and ended up talking about why he wasn’t as active in class the reason was that he did not want to show up Niro and get attacked because Niro was just a big brother with no emotional attachment to his younger sibling and simply enjoyed watching him squirm . His teacher came up with the solution to send him to an outdoor class for ” advanced ” students that was made because many children felt the same pressure from their peers Because it was very often that the younger kids in the class were beaten by their older siblings for no good reason and the teacher just let them get away with it . This solved both the problems with Neya and Niro. During his schooling he excelled as a student and loved history. His favorite form was mythology and he had heard many fables from his father before he left. His weak topic was math. He never grasped it. He was able to pass it, but only with constant help of his mother who was completely unconcerned about her sons strange attachment to a wild fox and that he older son just beat the crap out of him just for living.
After four years Takki’s father had yet to return. He had a talk with his mother and eventually they were talking about their pasts. Takki gained a great interest in her warrior past. Takki pleaded with her to train him to fight Because every good Sue needs away to defend themselves agains the obvious impending doom that just follows them around and who better to teach him then his mother with a bum leg . She pondered this for days and eventually decided to train him. He trained as often as he could and eventually became very proficient with his mother's old bow. Often he would go into the woods and train with Neya by playing games such as chase. Am I to understand that little Neya, the fox, was totally okay with being chased around with a bow and arrow?
After six years of training Takki feels ready to go into the world and search for his father and a cure for his mother’s crippled leg. except that this would make him twenty when previousdly he was only eighteen… so the time machine is real. By the way, mom could just go see a freaking doctor and figure out what the hell is wrong with her. Though, after waiting almost twenty years to do that she may be screwed.
Pet: umm, dude, no new sections in the form, du-huh.
Neya is a red fox whose mother was killed by skin hunters Like bambi except for stupider . She was chased into Takki’s home town by a group of children with sticks. Takki protected her and an everlasting bond was formed. She is about 10 lbs, 18 inches at the withers, and 38 inches long from nose to tail. Of course, mommy is gone and she chooses Mister Anti-Social himself to be her new guardian.
She is extremely fast and can outrun almost anyone. Neya does not usually fight but instead scouts or catches food for them to eat. She has acute senses and can pinpoint an enemy over 100 feet away. While they are traveling though unfamiliar territory she leaves urine to mark where they have been. Umm, eww gross and also if she’s so fast why did she need Tacky to save her?
Neya is very curious but will listen to Takki when they are sneaking , but only then any other time she just ignores him like any good living thing should do . Often Neya will climb up onto Takki’s shoulders and rest. Neya is not always with Takki but is always ready to be called to his aid. When she does fight she will pounce from a hiding place and latch on to the opponent’s neck like the vicious weasel that she is.
Sample RP:
Takki began to feel a bead of sweat form on his brow. He scanned to forest floor, looking for any sign of movement. Takki’s search was fulfilled when a small red blur raced across the leafy ground. Takki’s hair blew free of its constraints as he moved from tree to tree and eventually dropped to the ground.
”I know you are around here somewhere. But where?” He thought to himself as he searched for any signs that his target had passed through here. He heard a sound from a hole under the roots of a tree. He began to spin around when the red blur knocked him on his back. Takki felt the fox’s small, wet tongue licking his face.
“Enough Neya!” Takki said with a smile.
They laid on the leafy ground both panting hard …awkward… . Takki was beginning to fall asleep when a wet tongue licked him back awake. He groggily opened his eyes as Neya was pulling on his clothing with her teeth. As he opened his eyes hey saw an orange glow between the trees.
“Neya, we have to get home, come on girl.” He said as he leapt to his feet. Not out searching for father anymore? Decide the big bad world outside your displaced town was too much?
His companion arose and answered with a bark. With Neya leading the way the duo ran at full speed back to the village.
When they finally made it back both his mother Now his moms a lesbian, when did this happen?! was standing at the doorway with Niro smirking behind. She had obviously been waiting awhile judging by the worried look on her face but not long enough for her anger to fade.
“Takki, you may be old enough to find a job but you are not old enough to stay out until all hours of the night under my roof, do you understand?” Tacky: “But Mo-om,” Mommy: “Don’t you ‘but mom’ me mister!” His mother scolded him in an angry tone with her finger pointed at her while the other was engaged in holding her crutch.
Takki’s shoulders dropped and he looked towards the ground, not to show submission but to hide the anger he held towards Niro for mocking him literally behind his mother’s back and he would exact revenge later in a ‘smart’ manner. Muwhahhah…. Going to say, not nearly as satisfactory as a good ol’ punch to the face . He made a nod and headed into the house but not without receiving a quick smack to the back of the head from Niro.
”Its okay, the snakes should be looking for food any time now…” He thought to himself, remembering the present he left in Niro’s room, who’s doors never opened Holy Christ, this family is sick! .
He knew by now that being home late meant no dinner but it really didn’t bother Takki that much since he was anorexic as he and Neya found a sweet berry bush and had eaten to their heart content. He walked sullenly into his room and shut the door lightly. He let himself fall into his bed and let out a big sigh. He was nowhere near the point of sleepiness but he was falling asleep on the leaf ridden, stick infested ground of the forest earlier so he let his mind wonder. Eventually his train of thought led him to an interesting idea.
”I think I may be ready to go out into the world. But how?”
He quickly popped back into consciousness and sat up in his bed as the thought traveled through his head.
”I could just leave, but then mom would be horrified. Telling her wouldn’t be the best idea ever either though…” Just then an idea popped into his head. He climbed to his feet and carefully stepped over Neya, who decided to nap in the middle of the floor, and quickly scribbled down on some spare parchment,
I have decided to start my journey now.
It is not you fault in any way. In fact I am doing this to help you.
I know that if I search I can find a cure for your injury and you’ll be able to walk again. even though you seem to get along well enough, standing at the door for hours waiting for me
That is not the only reason. You know where I am going to go first.
I am heading directly to Ba-Sing-Sei to search for Dad.
I know all of your objections but I have to, and I can not return until I complete at least one of those goals for it would be to hard to leave again if I did.
Your loving son,
Takki Tacky
Takki cut his long hair in a single swipe with his hunting knife to give his mother a something to hold on to of him. Eww, of all the things to leave your mother why in gods name would you give her your hair!? Tears began to fall from his eyes as he draped Neya across his shoulders and climbed out the window.
This is the longest turd in history. Really. The longest piece of crap I have ever encountered. So many words, saying so little. YOU ARE A WASTE OF WORDS, WORD-WASTER!