Barret Wallace

[barretwallace]

Name: Barret Wallace

Age: 24

Gender: Male

Nation of Origin: United Republic (Earth kingdom heritage)

Bender? What Element?: Earth bending he senses his surroundings to know where he is going he is a strong earth bender who plans all his moves carefully.

Physical Appearance: He is quite a big person standing at 6 ft 9 he is big muscled due to the had work at his farm. He has a scar on his left hand and a scar going down his right leg.

Clothing: Barret wears a flat hat along with with long gray coat with a got streak going through the middle of it, he also wears gray trousers with shoes with the sols ripped of the bottom of the shoe.

Equipment?: He bring round a family memento left from the 100 year war era which is a bracelet with the old earth kingdom logo on it.

Job: Probender

Personality: Barret is quite a joyful fellow and is said to have a sense of humor from the other people in Republic City but he sometimes gets angry and he tries to destroy everything with his rock bending due to losing his temper.

Background: Barret was born blind in Republic City with his twin brother water-Bender Kane. Barret and his brother had so much fun together when they were younger. But that all ended when a fire bending bandit broke into his family's house killing his brother and his mother and leaving 2 permanent scars on his left hand and right lower leg from him trying to fight him.
10 years have passed since that day and Barret moved to Republic City to start a new life as a pro-bender he has done very well so far but he is finding it hard when he has no money to spend on food.

Sample RP: Barret got up as his body got a nervous chill, he didn't know where he was and how the hell he got here.
He sensed someone was here and then he heard a echo of someones voice fill the empty house making it easier to hear.
He was happy someone was here but why what did he need to do eventually he went a whispered to himself with his deep voice "better keep quite can't let anyone hear me.

[Uhchakuhlak]

Hellu n' welcome to Feng Shui. I be Uhchakuhlak, one of the mods around here.

I happy that you've decided to join us and try to knock a layer of dust of this site. And if I'm not pouncing too soon and you're finished with your profile, then consider this an informal review from me regarding your profile but a review nonetheless. Other than a need to have your fields bold and underline, I request that you thoroughly view over previously accepted and submitted profiles, as well as our site's Profile Aid sections here and here, because right now your profile is wearing a dental floss bikini in the middle of an arctic blizzard.

You'll need more than what you have to clear so we can play. Also your profile feels it leans more to the Aang era. For the citizens of this world, the time period is less medieval--or even wild west in comparison--and more ragtime elevator music, if you get the idea.

[barretwallace]

I've modified it I'm new to this and only yesterday I finished my back to back watch of Legend of Aang so I was confused on what my guy would look likein clothing.

[Uhchakuhlak]

Ah. Yeah, we are in the Korra era, 70something years after Aang's series and it's early 1900s setting.

And I may not get around to a proper review until the oncoming weekend, so you have more than enough time to browse through the links I've posted. They can catch you up to speed into what we're wanting from our players before we can RP with each other.

And if you need any help, just jump into this thread, the choi box at the bottom of the page or pm me.

[Uhchakuhlak]

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*cracks old cracklin reviewin bones* Been so long since I've done this here.

Please make certain your profile follows the standard profile form as posted here. That includes using only the same fields provided as well as underlining and bolding the fields. You can even copy-paste the code box if you want too.

Name: [/u] As per the rules you’ll need to change your character’s name to something more fitting to the show’s/game’s universe. You can dig here for suggestions and ideas.

Physical Appearance:[/u] Give us an idea of what sort of big he is. Is he just tall with muscles, built like a linebacker, the physique of a swimmer/surfer, what? What do the scars look like? What does the rest of him even look like?

Clothing:[/u] GRAY!! What is it with so many profiles wanting that for a colour? Give us a better idea of what these clothes look like and their condition, like you did with his shoes.

Equipment?: [/u] Any idea what the bracelet looks like or even made of? Ditch the job field as it’s not needed, but his job as a probender can be mentioned elsewhere in throughout the profile.

Personality: [/u] Tell us more about this jovial fellow. What’s his sense of humor like and what does he take in to be described as such by other people? What makes him an angry person, especially violently anger. What are some other aspects of his personality—things like dreams, fears, attitudes, beliefs, etc. for example?

Background:[/u] This section, often the heaviest and most detailed part of your profile. And, like I strongly advise anyone, you may want to rethink your character concept if you’re trying to go with a character traits shared by a canon character. In this case, that would be Toph’s visual impairment and compensation for it. You can try to keep it if you want, BUT you’re gonna have to show why I should let you keep it. Since the visual impairment is inarguably a major facet of the character’s life, there will be hefty mention of it—so you may want to really reconsider having such a character trait.

So was his twin-brother sighted or blind as well? What was his childhood and life like in Republic City and family? What are some strong memories or events that occurred in his life?

As for the random vandal/act of extreme violence/family death, I am denying that—just as I’ve been doing with a number of other profiles. Instead of taking a lazy, even vulgar, way out applying effort to your profile—and writing in general—I want you to actually come up with a backstory that doesn’t involve death and destruction—unless you can REALLY convince me that you should keep it.

And no long time skips. You give us some idea of his life in those past ten years and bring us to spend on him to the start of his intro in the game.

Sample RP:[/u] Minimum for the sample is to be 150 words. And put your best foot forward. This serves as a semi-first-post, audition, a way for you to get a feel for your character, and a general idea to other players the sort of character their characters will be playing with.

But congratulations at joining us and having your first review. You've made it to step... two? And like I’ve mentioned earlier, check through some of our current profiles to get an idea of wants wanted around here and a feel of the characters you’ll be playing with. And if you need in further help, talk to us in the choi, the general thread or private message. =-)